Itís in the Eyes Review
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A psychopath is killing young co-eds in Washington, D.C., and presenting them as sacrificial gifts to the goddess Kali. He sees himself as a modern-day ThuggeeóKaliís followers who murdered over a million India travelers in the 1800s.

Deputy Chief Cory Swink of the Arlington County Police Department is all out of answers, and heís taking heat from the chief, whoís pressuring him to find this guy. In desperation, he turns to Lars Neilsen and his Alpha Team. They can get results where he canít.

Lars, a college professor and part-time sleuth, heads a team that aids the police department in finding criminalsóexcept that they sort of work outside the law. Most of the time, Lars would rather execute the suspect instead of bringing him in. Since his team is not an official arm of the law, he figures that they can do what needs to be done, without their hands being tied. More or less, theyíre glorified vigilantes. And, haunted by the last victimís eyes, Lars has no intentions of bringing in her killer alive.

Itís in the Eyes isnít really much of a thrillerónot to mention that very little of this novel works within the law, since half of what the Alpha Team does to catch the criminal would be thrown out of court.

The story gets bogged down in too much character exposition. While itís good to have well-rounded characters, these characters are pointy more than they are round. For instance, I didnít really care to know that Lars is impotentóor how he fixes that in bed. I also didnít need to know every time Tiger burped or passed gas. And I didnít need Doris to bread down suddenly, out of the blue, and tell Lars that she was molested by a priest as a child. None of those characterizations had anything to do with the plot.

The story, meanwhile, wasnít developed enough to hold my interest. I wanted to read more about the investigation of the victimsí deaths and less about Larsís ogling every female who walked past him (and I could have done without his very male thoughts on the females, too). The plot and the characters seem to meander all over the place, going off on tangents that have very little to do with the murder mystery.

Since this is a self-published novel, I wasnít surprised to find the usual beginner mistakes and distractions. But, to put it simply, Itís in the Eyes is an unpleasant, frustrating story, and I wouldnít recommend giving it a go. Instead, I recommend Inquest on Imhotep, a stronger self-published novel by Derek Adie Flower.

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